In the first two weeks of Nov. LA had another recording breaking winning streak with six wins in a row. Which was taken away by the San Jose Sharks on Nov. 15th. The San Jose is my favorite team so I was very intrigued by their breaking of this streak. So of course, when LA came back two weeks later to start a new winning force, I had to follow it.
This article is a coverage of the game and what I liked most about it is that there was a full chart of the stats at the bottom including penalties. Another thing that I really appreciated was that it was posted the night of the game, almost immediately following, that is something that I am hopeful about in the future, covering games is one of my favorite things to do in journalism.
Something I didn't like was the lead, I feel that one of my strong points in my writing is my ability to write leads. That is how I always find my angle, I write my lead first. And the lead of this article is very plain and doesn't make the reader want to continue to the end.
Perhaps I'm being a little overly critical, but I thought that some of the information wasn't relevant. Although it was a synopsis of the game, some of the information just wasn't needed and made the article a little wordy.
But, to keep my critique balanced, I really appreciated the fact that the writer used hockey lingo. It makes me feel good when I can read something that not everyone would understand and completely get it. However if someone who didn't know hockey was reading it, they would be slightly lost.
Something I thought was funny, it must be the editing pet peeves, is that it was an article on PE.com but it was provided by the Associated Press and they didn't even follow AP style! Maybe it's a little different when it's something that goes on the web instantly, BUT the writer should know a little bit more.
There was one quote, from LA's goalie Jonathon Quick, saying that he feels responsible for the loss. But I wasn't sure if the writer got it themselves or if it was another source, and if it was, there were no attributions. And it was also placed in an awkward spot in the article.
The content of the article was very informative despite its inconsistencies and I was excited to read about the game considering that I was unable to watch it for myself. Overall I liked the article despite my many issues with it. It also makes me happy that an inland empire publication takes the time to not only cover big issues in hockey, but also posts game coverage.
"Overtime goal ends LA's streak" PE.com
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